刚看完第二章。开篇的序,很带感,画面感很强。故事的展开与文笔相得益彰,不疾不徐,节奏很好,很棒的作品。
携拙作(无间地狱)前来外交,祝大作越写越好,不日成神!另如你回访,我必收藏,你若收藏,我必红票奉上,你若赠我红票,我必充钱打赏,掷此一言,一言九鼎,互惠惠利,同登大寳!
我想下面的意思是让你分章,而不是在一章里面分。。。。
This is actually the fist Chinese novel I read, I think this might be a great chance to get into Chinese language arts.
XD I believe the author will start a new genre about online novel! Guys from a American's view, the book is much better than those garbage which their author is trash!! Anyway, I really think this is a great one!
《这个道士不太嫩》来访,互相支持,祝大大早日成神
一章太长了,作者可以分几章。。。
分段也可以多些,不然看着有点累啊~